The Icon Posted October 23, 2005 Share Posted October 23, 2005 (edited) Right i'm no poet but this is inspired by an old schoolfriend who for some reason decided to take her own life over love. Try to not laugh too hard thanks. Betrayal a short poem by Brian Weldon (Me) "Copyright [August 2005][brian Weldon] "All Rights Reserved" The girl stood on the waters edge contemplating her life. She had just turned twenty & already she was & lover & a wife. Now it had all being snatched from her so cruelly. Had it come to this there had to be another way surely? The waves crashed up against her feet but she was not ready not yet. She stood on the golden beach & watched her final sunset. The sun slowly vanished from her lonely sight & day inevitably turned into night. She stood there on her own with a last lingering doubt was this right? For her it was she walked slowly into the cold blue sea. As the waves swept over her they accepted her with glee. The pull of the waves so quickly pulled her under. She did not fight as the ocean slowly tore her asunder. The last thought to flash through her mind was what she had seen. As her life slowly ebbed away she thought if only it had not been. She had found her newly wed in the arms of her best friend. The last drop of life left her body & for her it was the end. I know it's a bit too rhymie in parts but hey as I said it's a first for me so I can (hopefully) only get better. Edited October 27, 2005 by The Icon 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Miss T Posted October 23, 2005 Share Posted October 23, 2005 Very sad. For some reason you have use the word being instead of been :? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Icon Posted October 23, 2005 Author Share Posted October 23, 2005 That was a typo it should have be been. Did you really find it sad though as that was the intention as it is how she really took her life. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JobberJoe Posted October 23, 2005 Share Posted October 23, 2005 Good lad, keep it up... we could get you a beret (sp? Those little french hats) and some white make up ! Enjoyable, bit emotional, 6 out of 10 ! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Icon Posted October 23, 2005 Author Share Posted October 23, 2005 Beret no thanks. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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